this is what i aspire to be... i only wish that i could write as well as you can. amazing.

so you're like my hero. i don't know how you write so amazingly. you use nouns as adjectives & i wish i did that because it's like gahh. yeah. you're too cool.

gorgeous.

Wonderful. I love your new format, it is quite unusual. The wording is perfectly chosen, as usual, quite dense and full of imagery, I love that. The poem is so true, I know this feeling when the loved one cannot be replaced by any other person, I feel this quite acutely at the moment. *sigh*

Unusual structure - I like it.

I like how the second line "Rubber silk spray..." has no punctuation. It gives it a different feel.

I love the different snapshots through the poem. They're not clear straight away though, it's sort of like you start reading the line, and then you get a picture - like developing a photo. It becomes clearer slowly until you can see what it is.

Great poem, keep writing!

love it, i love your style. its really beautiful and graceful, at the same time wired and wicked. "and love is but a translucent call" - pretty imagery.

I adore this one. The pictures you create with your words...I could actually feel/taste the ash of her lips. Bittersweet; bitter because of the deep deep sadness in it and sweet because it's so beautiful.

whoa, interesting set up with this one but i rather like it, it leaves positive but i dont know, very beautifully written and expressive, awesome job

Wow! That is positively intriguing and beautiful. I love this line: "sticky candied kisses run down his face placed along by grinning." So much lovely imagery there.I also wanted to reply to the review you left for my poem/song, "Autumn and Iris and Apnea." I thought you might like to know that I recorded it and it's available here: http://cinnamon-skies.org/autumnirisapnea.mp3

How dare you write awesome poetry while I'm busy doing homework! Seriously, this was like...wow. I envy your poetic ability (especially in dark poetry, I'm so rusty now you could probably hear the hinges squeak)! -ahem- anyways, I love it, memories could last forever, whether bright or painful, I'm just lucky I have more cheerful ones then not ^-^ Heh, amazing as always!

~Sumi-chan; What you call love, I call pain.

Sorry I've not reviewed this before. Haven't been on FictionPress in forever. I love how this is split into three. Great work - very abstract. Lime

wow... vivid and emotional~~ i'm at awe~

keep writing!

first of all, i love the new name. ^_^ i was a bit confused at first, but now i'm alright again. thank you for your review, and for your rather spontaneous proposal. ^_~ what can i say? this was beautiful and absolutely brilliant, just like everything else you write. just ... amazing.

This was an ok piece. The way it was set confused me. I love your creativity though.

Wow. Powerful, abstract sense of imagery. Almost macabre. I like this a lot!