Good job..God bless!

To use a well-known phrase, it "packs a punch."

I like it. And it ends perfectly, with the reader wondering if it will end happily or whether she'll take the first flight home. No grammatical errors or anything that I could see.

I read some other stories of yours--though I haven't got the patience now I promise I'll get around to it--and you're now on my favorite authors list. Just to, you know, warn you.

The end.