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| s k doyle 2006-05-05 ch 1,  | abuseAmazing imagery. I really felt like I was there, seeing, tasting, smelling everything. I don't however quite like the way you wrapped up the end, it seemed to cheapen the beauty of the flow. Perhaps you could alude to it being Helen as subtly as you did the other images? |
| wordsworth in a garbage can 2005-08-24 ch 1, | abuseawesome. the format was still good, despite FP getting in the way. |