Sounds like the thoughts and feelings of someone who is in danger, especially a burning building. Nice rhythm, pretty catchy. Keep up the great work.Always Watching...-Soul

It was short, but I liked how it was written where the lines weren't more than a few words. It made it easier to read than a poem that's just mashed together on the left side. This was pretty good. I think this is what people would think during a fire. The only thing is that I think you should make an extended version with more detail. Besides that, this was good.

~Lady Cirien Phoenix of the Eternal Phlame

P.S. Thank you for the review on "Dedication to the Closest One In My Life."