O—all of us—seeking premonitions,

Remember that in nineteen thirty nine,

High up in the Bavarian mountains,

Looking at aurora borealis,

Blood-tinged and shimmering in crimson hues,

Hitler decided it would take a war,—

That violence coursed Germany's destiny,

O yes—a madman can inspire a race,

And lead us lemming-like to death's sharp fall,

So think a bit about dream's prophecies,

Or symbols that Thou posit live in clouds,

Be careful of meanings Thou give shadows,

For penumbra's cast may haunt Thy future.

Once again, the tense is slightly shaky. It lacks your normal vocal fluency in writing - at a long stretch, it might sound like ranting.

I think it comes in a pair with the other poem, about drowning people.

You do have this odd thing about red.

The last bit is probably the verse that appeals to me. The last line.

whoa. for the angriness of it all (??!!). and how i'm slightly (but only slightly) angered by it,although in an inexplicable way.actually, not very sure about that...oh i loved the parts about the moon..i love the moon but i love how you described it as well "She is bald like a temple monk". we shun beauty like it's te equivalent of er...bad poetry. hor? but i like. also i know this review is kind of disjointed, making me sound kind of retarded. well. sry. keep writing =D

~Pam

whe i liked the imagery as usual and i think it's quite amazing how you like... manipulate the poem from the beginning to the end. and now i think sunsets are scary -.- but anyway good job again!

Ahh, another poem filled with strong imagery. I really loved the part about the moon being "bald like a temple monk".

I notice that you used the imagery of sunsets, fire, red, and seduction a lot in your work.

One thing I enjoyed was the comparison between the sun, the moon, and the sea. You gave them distinct personalities and I love that in poetry.

However, I have to say that the emotions in the poem were jumbled and there wasn't just one tone throughout the entire thing, which led to a bit of confusion on my part. But perhaps that was your intention?

Anyway, good job all in all. And never stop writing, you do have talent.

~CR