Cool chapter, thank you for updating. This is very interesting and I will have to talk to you about this in more depth, one thing real quick about the two sisters, if they are twins why do they act like one is so much older than the other? Hopefully this will get fleshed out later. Overall very interesing, but try and make them a ittle longer in the future. Talk to ya later, God bless.
-Lex

The basic plot is definately interesting. I did detect a few run-ons and fragmented sentences. You might want to run over those again and check them. Obviously I could be wring, but it doesn't hurt to check. Another suggestion would be to word it like an ancient text, like an excerpt from some ancient history or something. It would definately add that "time out of mind" flare to it.Anyway, sounds good, and I hope you continue it.

Hey Yogini-Gal, I like the beginning of this story, the idea is very original and it could be a sort of travel back-in-time-and-become the older-time's-hero type of story. I sure hope you continue it, if you need any help or ust want to bounce ideas off someone let me know. God bless- Lex