Love it, Kris! It's quite good for something done in such a short space of time. I hope to see more of your original works on this site. Wouldn't hurt to check out mine, ne? ~ Jamie

I love fictionpress! Great place.The story was really good Kris. Im impressed on the directness and detail that's in this one shot, because you didn't waste time getting to the point.

Thing is, I was under the impression that Frankie, from the way he acted and the way he spoke, was much more connected to the boss than the others involved in the robbery, and I was thrown off when all the guy's screwed him over in a heartbeat.

Even at the end when you stated that he was no more a valuable or connected guy to the boss than the others in the robbery, my point is this (and you'll know this from Goodfellas):You do not rat on a friend! It's important, remember! SHOWS HOW TRUST WORTHY YOU ARE!

Dispite the fact that this is just a story, not a real event, not a film and you probably couldn't care less, I wanted to point out, that in your need to get this story done, you've created some extremely unloyal characters! HA HA HA HA HA! Sorry, I loved this story, honest, I just think it's amusing that a robbery/murder suspect found at the scene of the crime holding money, looking terrified and owning shoes with blooded footprints could be offered community service to turn in the ring-leader, who it turns out, has no power over them at all and will be liable to get killed, along with the rest of the boys, by the boss, for getting caught by the feds!! It tickles me slightly, but than again, considering the time-frame in which you had to do this, it really is impressively written.

Write some more crime stories, you've got a gift. (Must be from watching Casino and the like. Does wonders, trust me) ^_^

Great story. There is no point in reading your school one as it will be identical to this one. Other than that great fic.