I would mention the same sorts of things I have for your Cyberman tales: descriptions that are too detailed, watching your tenses etc., but you've got those reviews from me already so just make sure to proof-read and stuff if you continue this.

This was quite funny, I laughed at Milo insulting the goblins:

"And don't come back, ya bums!"

It made me giggle.

I'm curious to know why the goblins want all these diamonds, but I guess I'll have to wait for an update...

(PS: Thanks very much for your review, I'm glad you like my story so far.)

Merry Christmas, enjoy your winter break! =D

hey, keep up the good work. i should probably read the cyberman stuff, i've only read the first couple chapters of the first one. i think somebody already said this, but yeah, make sure to put space between different people when they talk. besides that, awesome!

Goblin popularity, there's somethin' that don't come out in the wash.Please continue

Aw crud is right, Goblin knights aren't much fun when you can't wail on 'um. So, how will our canninely enhanced hero get outa this one.

That's quite a statment, especily on the first day of school.OH! You reminded me I have to go to school tomorrow. That tanks.

Thank you both, Limitbreakcrew, check out my Cyberman stories- I think you'll like them.

An orange wolf wailing on goblins?ALRIGHT!So how did our lil' Shane Allen get the full, er, half wolf? I'll just wait it out I guess.

Yes a very good job there chum. Update soon. One suggestion is that you press the return after someone talks makes it a lot easier to read.

Sasuke-Kun(real fictionpressname)