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| Anya Tempest 2005-12-21 ch 4,   | I would mention the same sorts of things I have for your Cyberman tales: descriptions that are too detailed, watching your tenses etc., but you've got those reviews from me already so just make sure to proof-read and stuff if you continue this. This was quite funny, I laughed at Milo insulting the goblins: "And don't come back, ya bums!" It made me giggle. I'm curious to know why the goblins want all these diamonds, but I guess I'll have to wait for an update... (PS: Thanks very much for your review, I'm glad you like my story so far.) Merry Christmas, enjoy your winter break! =D |
| crisco384 2005-08-31 ch 4, | hey, keep up the good work. i should probably read the cyberman stuff, i've only read the first couple chapters of the first one. i think somebody already said this, but yeah, make sure to put space between different people when they talk. besides that, awesome! |
| Mr.M7 2005-08-31 ch 4, | Goblin popularity, there's somethin' that don't come out in the wash.Please continue |
| Mr.M7 2005-08-29 ch 3, | Aw crud is right, Goblin knights aren't much fun when you can't wail on 'um. So, how will our canninely enhanced hero get outa this one. |
| Mr.M7 2005-08-28 ch 2, | That's quite a statment, especily on the first day of school.OH! You reminded me I have to go to school tomorrow. That tanks. |
| cyberboy13.5 2005-08-28 ch 1, | Thank you both, Limitbreakcrew, check out my Cyberman stories- I think you'll like them. |
| Mr.M7 2005-08-28 ch 1, | An orange wolf wailing on goblins?ALRIGHT!So how did our lil' Shane Allen get the full, er, half wolf? I'll just wait it out I guess. |
| Limitbreakercrew 2005-08-27 ch 1, | Yes a very good job there chum. Update soon. One suggestion is that you press the return after someone talks makes it a lot easier to read. Sasuke-Kun(real fictionpressname) |