You definitely have a way with words, which enables the reader to become emotionally connected to the main character in this piece. Keep writing JAIA. :)

Random browsing brough me to this peice. While I'm not qualified for constructive criticism, I can tell you that I did enjoy it. There is a good life lesson here, success thru failure. I can imagine this girl sulking by herself, dweling on her thoughts. I felt sorry for her.