Awesome kathy, it made me all sad-like...probably doesn't help that I have the Edward Scissorhands soundtrack playing in the backround. Oh dear. I love the chorus, it rocks my socks(and I'm not wearing any!) I like the line "burnt by our own fire we created" but it might read better "burnt by the fire we created". That depends though, cause if this is a song, than yours might sound better with the tune...or something. And the line "perhaps deserved just what we got" could possibly be better connected to the line before it. Otherwise, it's amazing! Lissa says WOOT for KATHY!

Blessed be!

slightly too explicit for my taste...but i liked how your emotions came across strongly in this piece. keep writing =D

wow, i love it, your use of the language is fantastic