dude but sora rocks * gives puppy dog eyes*

lol i loved the story. i just wished she got together with Raku. lol but i loved it nyways

i think pairing Myra with Kagehoshi was a mistake because he only came in in the end and i was hoping for a Myra/Sora ending otherwise it was a good story i loved the scene with raku myra and the killer moss and if you can develop relationships a bit before marriage then you have a great future as a writer

sweet. i like.

NO! MYRA AND KOJI WERE SUPPOSED TO END UP TOGETHER! T__T

Well... I'm sorry but the story was enjoyable until the last chapter. Myra getting with Hoshi dude, well it sucked. First off it made little sense. He was not in the majority of the story, therefor giving little plot aboout him. Second it would have been more romantic if she had ended up with one of the three demons. Maybe if you had brought the Hoshi character in the story more it would have made a better ending. But as things stand now it's just depressing.

Reading you work makes me want to draw it so bad. Yay for chibi Koji! Oh!? Whats this? A possible romance or just a simple gag to tease the fans? I wonder?

Myra! Married!! To Kagehoshi! (Dreamer's head explodes from shock but is quickly revived.) I saw it coming... Okay, I did not see the hole "marry" thing but I figured you'd pull off something similar. It's a little disappointing because I was rutting for a Myra/Koji parring. Koji, the little punk is hard to draw but I love his personality. All in all, Kagehoshi is a wonderful character. He and Myra seem like a well matched couple.

Awesome, the last chapter! I've been following this story for years (checking once a month to see if it updated).
It's sort of a relief that Myra ended up with Kagehoshi. I had wondered why he garnered so much mention early in the story, and now that curiosity's satisfied. Frankly, none of the other guys would suit her as well. At the very least, i'd hoped she wouldn't end up with Koji- 'cause he's a jerk.
Sora's darker side caught me by surprise, but he's still one of my favorite characters. I feel bad for Raku, though. He doesn't exactly get much of a break anywhere, does he?
It's good to see you finally came up with a plausible way to break the barrier. One plothole successfully filled.^^
I'd ask if you were planning a sequel, but no pressure. I'd be willing to keep checking over the next few years just in case. :P
Thank you for providing continuous entertainment. Happy new year.^^

can't wait for the next chap. i really am enjoying this story!

Finally. I caught up to the latest chapter. I started reading you story awhile ago and found it quite interesting but stopped at chapter 2 for some reason. I have it in my alert list and always ignored the updates. I couldn't sleep one night and thought I should catch up on my reading and been doing so for the past week or so and now that Iv caught up I can say I full enjoy reading it and can't wait to read more.

Well, it's okay if you don't update for a while. I would be a hypocrite if I told you to hurry it up. (I haven't updated Tsubasa-hime in a few months, despite having up to chapter fifteen written.)

Sora wants to be friends with dangerous animals? O.o... I wouldn't.

How is it she keeps ending up alone with them? First Raku- To which I say,"Yay!"- now Sora... So next is Koji?

I like Emi, I really do, but she's getting to be kind of annoying with her Raku obsession...

Ha ha! Koji glitters! Or was that it? I think she said something along the lines of,"Light up like a christmas tree"...

Sora's so silly! How can he be afraid of the dark when he glows?!

Anywho, wonderful updates, well worth the wait! Sorry I haven't been reviewing.

Ciao!

First, I like the way you write, sort of a stream of consciousness approach to first person narrative.

I dont think I BELIEVE the motivations behind Mrs. Miller's actions. She, as the person in charge and the head librarian, probably wouldnt be calling Myra a mere 19-year-old (hyphenated, by the way) "still" in college. More likely she would say she was immature -- she is -- and that she does not have a degree. She wouldn't have phrased it as "There is no way... to be in charge of the city library."

Myra's thoughts are kind of foulmouthed and overly angry... understandably, she was just rudely awakened, but she has too much sarcasm and too many swearwords on the tip of her tongue.

Try to add more description. This is a problem throughout your story, there isn't enough description of the setting, the people, the sounds, smells, tastes and such. What does Mrs. Miller look like anyway?

"Uh, oh… decision time. Should I cut through the dark and spooky woods? The very same woods that, after a rather frightening experience as a child, I promised myself I would never enter after dark?" This is both abrupt and unreasonable. Myra has held to her resolution not to go in there all this time. Suddenly it's a tough decision? There really needs to be another reason why she would even take this forbidden path into consideration. Without a clear motivation, or some prior consideration about changing her mind about never going there, before she gets to this place, it doesnt seem like she would choose to enter the woods, even in a downpoor.

"If you haven’t guessed already, I..." "Did you hear that?" "So, now I’ll inform you..." "...I know what you’re thinking." Always reconsider when you're tempted to address the reader directly as 'you.' There is always and alternative. It is considered bad form, and serves to break the illusion of being a part of the story for the reader. I know your narrator would be telling the story that way, but it shouldnt be written that way. Just rewrite ti so it doesnt use the pronoun 'you' and avoid the problem altogether.

Now, as for grammar and spelling:
flashy, loudmouthed
still in college
why am I bringing
Okay, that is ten times
be in charge of the City Library
A freakin’ chimpanzee
my jacket is losing its effectiveness,
lights of my house shining
enjoy the yummy box of ice cream
“Myra-Hime,” --is that the only thing he knows how to say?
DEFINITELY, not DEFIANTLY!
kneeling next to the cranky guy
at the risk of sounding biased

My thoughts on this first chapter:
Needlessly belaboring the point, I think you have to rewrite this in third person. The story flows well, the dialogue carries the plot along well. It needs more imagery describing the setting and the characters. You could convert it to third person very easily by inserting "Myra thought." And don't forget that thoughts are meant to be written in Italics.

This has to be one of the coolest stories I have ever had the pleasure of reading in my entire life!

I managed to finish reading all 22 Chapters in an hour last night. Nice, can't wait for the next chapter. =) By the way, I'm a Koji fan. =p