okay... I don't know if you'll ever update this but I would reall love it if you did! I think this is a great start! I know it's been like three years since you posted this, but just consider it! =D

Great beginning can't wait till the next chapter ^_^

um...ok it's interesting so far, can't wait for more.

Whoo. The challenge was given by one of my favourite authors, that's why I decided to look at it. Not bad a story. I'm intrigued. Keep up the good work, eh? =)

cant wait for the next one =)

This is seriously my favorite story that you've written so far! It's got a great beginning and is naturally filled with potential!

Please update soon! This is such a wonderful story!

Wow this is really good so far so I hope you update soon!

hey d.f.

it's really pulled me in! I hope u update real soon..(i always say that don't i? well i'm impatient and love ur stories thats why!)

hope ur muse returns with new inspirations to pass on to you!

s2.q

whoo! this sounds perfect so far! i love clowns, they're so cute. and an amusement park? wonderful setting! wow, seriously, that's the perfect place for a story like this.

i love the name beatrix/beatrice! it's so prettay! is she the one who screamed? that's eerie. . . and who's Hart?

Omigasp. the person who grabbed her = the hot sadist, right? right!? please! lol. i want to meet him, hehe. a hot sadist in a theme park. that's just genius.

Whoa. Whooa, whoa, wait...what? What the hell's going on? :O Dude, this is great so far! I'm slightly freaked out by the clowns, 'cause clowns have always scared me, and an Amusement Park? Nice setting for the perfect murder. But what I reaally want to know is...who's the person that caught her? (Maybe it's Hart.) Aand, who's the person that screamed? And who's Beatrice? You mentioned her. Could Beatrice be the person that screamed? One criticism: The line, "Shutting her eyes tight..." - It should be "Shutting her eyes tightly..." since "Shutting" is acting as the verb, and "tightly" should act as the adverb.

You have to update soon! Please? Please! :P

I hope you enjoyed the ficathon.