MEH??

SWEET CLIFFIE PUT UP THE REST NOW!! *nodnod*

XD CD

Ryoma always makes me laugh. I love how he was freaking out about being made into a stew instead of pizza. He's just so... out there.

Lucas... *meowr* is as awesome as always. :)

Excellent chapter. I like how you figured out a way for them to all meet. Very creative. *pats*

General things that bugged me:

The setting: church or cave? You said both.

No offense, but constant caps lock gets annoying after a while. Same goes for the exclamation point and question mark. I know you're a hyperactive person, but sheesh... :P

Dude, your tense! Past or present? You gotta be consistant! *pokes you with a spork*

I still think this should be in third person... just because there's so many characters. It'd be less confusing, especially since they're all together now. That's just me though...

*pokes you again for being cliché*

*glares*

Grammar things:

"You’re friend..."

"Uh... fine. We help Flonne’s friend..."

"...totally helpless. 100 helpless." percent missing?

That's all I can remember... @__@

Great work and I hope to talk to you soon! ^_^

oh ok i see what ure doing noew. ure trying to do a summary and then eplain it in detail. very nice. the onlt thing that i can think of that isnt so well done is the aruptness of switching from the file to the actual person

until next time,

drakkarim

im probably teh only one to review the prologue, but whatever. your writing's not bad and the explanations are concise adn stratight to the point, although that cliffhanger is quite common, but from what ive seen so far, this story has potential.

gonna go read teh next chapter now,drakkarim

"Fangirl alert, you have been warned."

*squeals* OMG! Lucas is so friggin' awesome!! ^_^ I love his snarkiness. Gah! You kill me. He's so awesome. Yes, humans are stupid... very stupid in some cases. Oh man... *sighs* He's so cool.

Flonne/Josh are officially OTP. Yeppers.

This story just gets better and better. :D

*waves "I love Lucus" banner* Yes, Lucus officially has a fangirl. ^__^

This was good. From now on, write from Lucus's POV. The Scray Bunnies demand it so!

*attacks the ditz* Purple hair is my trademark, female dog! *humph*

We all know that Josh is a dolt. No need in explaining that. XD

Awesomeness dude! *thumbs up*

... *cracks up* the ditz is random but hilarious.

and what are you talking about! the last line is HILARIOUS!!

:) CD

Emotional. If you do reveal exactly what happened ( that made vamps and elves hate each other), however, be SURE to make it a big deal. Yeah, or else I will be mad.

*cracks up* *claps* It's always amusing to see two character in each other's faces like this...

*cracks up* vampy.

Now... this is odd. a centaur. I confused, but i will work it out somehow...

NI-i-ice chappie...

:) CD

Ha ha, the last line!

More of the mysterious centaur who knows too much. *stratches chin* Good work!

Aw, a chibi Flonne! XD

You know my opinion about Flonne. I *may* or may not ever like her again. :P

GO LUCAS!! Whoo!

Great chapter!

Hmm, flashbacks are always interesting. This chapter explains a litle more about her. I'm guessing this will make her join Josh, and she is currently unconscious. Anyway, this was a good read.

Aww... CUTE!! *smiles*

oh... YES!! Flonne's dead dad to the rescue! That sounds weird. ANYway... now she might start THINKING!!

:) CD

So sad! *takes out tissue* I'm sorry that's all I can think to say... You know how pre-occupied I am right now. Darn ... being a girl... yeah.

Great chapter as always! Your writing is just so awesome!

...what's going on here? this is the second race with their leaders messing with them. For the Dwarves it's Dwanity, for the elves it's their leader...

What is going ON??

:) CD