Paragraph structure takes a bit to get used to- but quite excellant in content.

Notes:

1. The first line has the title, as well as a second line, in one place. You should probably have it split.

2. Keep up the good work! :)

My god. That was so sad. Are you sure that you're only eleven?

sarah im almost crying right now. really. i mean there are little tears pooling in my eyes. the ants eating the butterfly upsets us. awesome last line. oh the poor butterfly. really awesome last line. oh! and i liked the bit about the 'waits' (they must have been related) yes fun stuff i would be laughing butdisturbing but so good