O...I LIKE. This is spiffy. Oh yes.

You have this changing speed throughout the whole thing that makes it come alive. The beginning is slow and gentle, but it starts to speed up as reality rushes in, and then it slows down as it comes back to reflecting on the whole thing. I really love how you did that.

It's tough to do rhyming in sets of four, and for the most part, you passed with flying colors. I think you're straining a little with "whispereth", but I can understand you were trying to make it sound like Shakespeare; it just doesn't have the natural feel that the rest of it does, though.

I really love the description of a sunbeam, and how the dust floats in it. "Daybreak's dream" sums that up so well.

You do have a natural talent for descriptions of nature. Again, the very specific choices make this all the more real, like using a foxglove and a swan instead of a flower and a bird. Keep it up! :)