OMFG.!
Zephyr/Sterlinq cracks me up.!! xDD
HES HILARIOUSS.! XD
hes my favorite character besides
Iggy. (;
uqh.
i love this story.!

wait so the prince is really loki's kid ? i can't wait to find out what happens next

Oh, that is cold. and a shocker. I didn't really expect that one...Interesting, though his dad could have been nicer about it, don't you think?

Intriguing

ImmortalIncarnate..

Ahahahahahah! LOL ROFLMAO! OMG lol. That was too funny! I so look forward to when Cassius kidnaps Zephyr again! I mean seriously! Wow that was really funny! My favorite part was when Cassius kissed Zephyr, that was hysterical! Thanks, and update soon kay?

LOL.
That's a huge plot twist, and I could have thought that Zephyr was Loki's son, since he was kinda unstable...
But that was totally unexpected. I haven't reviewed awhile because I've been really busy, but this was funny! and I got it 2 days after post! YESH!
Party party party

ImmortalIncarnate

Hey there.

I've been reading this story for a while and have been a fan. I finally got around to reading the rest, leaving off from "My First Kiss" part 2.

I like how it seems like you actually know what you're writing. A lot of writers seem to just wing it and post something up, thinking that a plausible ending would magically appear.

Your grammar and spelling are usually without fault, which is nice for a change. In this last chapter, here, you actually wrote "now way" instead of "no way" towards the end. You also seem to have a bit of trouble with the use of hyphens. When using a set of hyphens to separate a phrase, you would use a long hyphen without any spaces between them.
Example:
"When you go to the beach-assuming you still want to-make sure to bring extra sunblock."

Of course, they'd be long hyphens, which can be made by typing in two consecutive hyphens (--) and then hitting the space bar. It'll only work in word processors, though.

Another thing that I've noticed is that Nina is quite the crier. I understand that she is sensitive, but it seems to me that she cries way too easily. If you still want her to cry, try building up the emotion gradually, and then spilling the tears. Also, that whole "hands against chest" thing is really cliched.You can express her emotion through other actions. With it, it deteriorates what you're trying to spark in the reader.

that's not just with Nina, but with some other parts too. I'll be reading through and having this one emotion set in my mind, and then out of no where a completely different emotion comes. During the confrontation of Iggy and Leda during Nina's childhood chapter, I had thought of Leda being more stoic and stern, and then out of no where she starts tearing up and being emotional. I was more of a fan of how I thought she was. Leda seems like a strong character, not as sensitive as Nina.

You enjoy having you characters "sob" and "cry" quite frequently too. You can express their emotional without having them turn on the water works. Each person is different, and guys tend to have less sensitivity than girls. Therefore, it doesn't seem likely that Quinton could cry when the piano is gone. Of course he would be upset, but I highly doubt he would cry.

You might also want to whip out a Thesaurus. I've noticed that you repeat many words such as "lackadaisically," "chimed in," "pensively," and more. Next time you're going over your stories, if you see a word being used twice, count how many times you use it all together in the chapter. It's nice to exercise you elevated works, but try to use a variety. Make sure that the diction flows together. You couldn't want a simple sentence to contain an SAT word.

Lastly, I have yet to see the role of Zephyr. As Iggy puts it, he's just a "damn freeloading musician." His rants about music, inspiration, soul, and pure expression through sound are interesting to read, but that's pretty much it. I hope that in later chapters, he is given more responsibility or gets over his cowardice and plays a more important role in the story.

I hope you take this to heart, and keep writing. ^_^

Hey.I wanted I can see you actually took the time to make your story something special(:

Yay! Manga! (Even if it's without pictures!)
I like the effort put into the entire thing. Could you watch the spelling errors though? I need to find em again...

Anyway I like the idea of an inverse harem manga, the original idea was good, this is even better! ^_^

Thank you!!
ImmortalIncarnate
AKA Kittyluva2

I don't understand how those people at the message board could react so badly to an inverse harem. I mean, there are already inverse harems out there. Some examples are Fruits Basket, La Corda d'Oro and anything else that features a bunch of boys surrounding one girl they either like or care about.

This is good so far. I like Iggy, he seems funny. And Nina is easy for me to relate to.

more i need more please iam beging you please need more, i love iggy and the prince they are the freaking best please let her end up with one of them or both the rest of the guys are o.k but they would not be good for nina buy the way love the name and the crazy hunter guy just needs to die,i love iggy he acts like he know eveything about anything and the prince can shore like with a strate face i just loved it, it's the best please write more soon i put you on my favorite list and alert list cause it's killing me not to know what happens next i am officaly a big fan of yours...^-^

*looks from left to right*
Okay, I personally don't like Quinton too much. I'm rootin' for Iggy! *waves a li'l Iggy flag* GANBATTE, NE!

Wow I love the 5 gents so much! I was laughing the entire time I read, it's so good, I hope you update soon :D

I'm sorry I haven't reviewed in so long! I loved the interactions between the characters. The way they play off of each other is amazing. Delmar's spiel on earth history and genetics was brilliant, and Iggy and Gaia are almost like a stand up comedy duo. You're doing a much better job at keeping the homophones and grammar in line, but this one line:

“But there the one’s who need the most watching!”
should have read
"But they're (they are) the ones (not a possesive who need the most watching!"
Keep up the good work!

PacSol

P.S. Feel free to virtually slap me upside the head if you think I'm being a bit anal retentive. Truth be told, I'm known among my friends as a bit of a grammar stickler. Your story's still great, though, and I look forward to the next chapters!

*pensive look* update soon please, I must find out what happens!

How nice. When I finally get around to going in and updating my harem story, you update yours. Hooray!

The monologues were by far the best parts of this chapter, though that's not to say that the dialogues suffered; they were great as well. It's good to see you can take a break from action scenes.