Nice rhyming. It's pretty suspenseful/intense and kinda cool to think about living in someone's mind like that. Good job!

Really well done. I love the idea of being inside someone, and the title of the poem just jumped out at me. Really well written..kind of spooky, too. It made my heart beat fast..kind of a frantic but also such a calm feel. Awesome. These lines seem a bit forced to rhyme: Poke Poke./ Let me get a stoke/ and I affect your speach/ Hang on like a leach. But other than that, really well done.

I like this, the build up to the end was intense. Keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.