Wow, this is intense! Please update as soon as possible. I cannot stand waiting any longer. You're writing involves the reader so well. Good work!

OH MAN! I can't believe I actually forgot how wonderful this story is! Anwyay onto the review:
This was beautifully written. I loved your choice of adjectives and the sentence fluency. (Can you you say jealous much? XD)I also like the idea of Blood Prisoners. Kinda reminds me of sex slaves in vampire stories though. Hint, hint. ;) I think you've written this chapter very well. Explanation chapters are always the hardest, so if you don't like it that much-it's okay. A lot of people, including myself, have some pieces they dislike. But as I've stated before, this was very well written. But how did Hiroshi find her? O.O Is Kishin gonna stay, in my opinion, an **? You've gotta update or I shall send MY vampire army after you!

Great chapter! I love this story! Poor Shika though, she's been through so much.

Awesome! I like this story! It's kinda creepy, but it's still cool! Keep it going!

hi

Hello. I've been reading your story, so I think it's just fair that I review.

Well, your dialogue/characters/plot are good, and so far I haven't seen any spelling mistakes or anything. (But then, I'm not terribly nit-picky, so don't expect too much of that.)

I do have one thing to bring up, though, that seemed to be out of place in the story, and that is the Japanese bits. Either romanize the characters so that people can tell what the words are, or don't use the Japanese at all. Sorry if this seems a bit mean, but most people can't read Japanese at all. I'm a Japanese language student, so I can read (and understand) the text, but the majority of people can't. To add to it, it takes me a while to read it, and that slows up the story. Just a question, but...do you even know what the characters mean? ^^ That's my only complaint really. ^^ Good luck with this story and thanks for the update. *bow*

AWSOME

yes i'm still here You did really good. and yes it did explain some stuff though. the blood prisoner the way you descirbed it was really interesting.

i really look forward to your next chpt. ah man this is awsome i thought you gave up or died a miserable lonely dark death and a small dark corner (j/k).

ok how in the world did her uncle find her and why out of no where was he so tense with the vamp?and the guy that went to they're house is an enimy right?

well update soon
i wish u luck on your writing!
A Dark Rose

p.s.
can you give me your opinion on my story Angel of Death?(one of my stories...)i need your opinion cuz i dunno what to do no one's reviewing so i need 2 figure out sometin'

p.s.s.
it was still an awsome chpt. even if u didn't think so

I like it! Even though I'm not into anything vampire related this is cool! I'm adding you to my fav author list and this story into my fav stories list! Hey! Since I reviewed, would you like to see my stories? I'm currently working on chapter 8 of Crossover and I just started a new story called 'The Cherry Blossoms Have Fallen'. Would you like to see them? They're not very good though/

I like the way the brother and sister argue so much, very amusing.At times, the main character seems a little ditsy, but I quite like that about her.

The only thing that distracts me from this story is that the characters names both begin with S, and because they aren't common names, it's quite hard to remember who is who. Still, that's probably just me being an airhead, luv Kaitx

At the start, contrasting her being "tired" but "urgent" is hard to picture. Tired people are usually groggy so either go more into depth, change one of those, or have a little transition.

Be careful not to overuse elipses.

Your dialogue is very well done as I believe I mentioned in the first chapter, keep with that.

This is a personal preference, but it's a dangerous game to play when you have names that are super similiar. It's east to confuse them during the chapter.

bold is usually a no-no in stories. It can be rather distracting. If you want to emphasize something thats in italics, take it out of italics.

Good way to end the chapter. I hope this was helpful and not too nitpicky!

Mack

If you're interested, we have updated. If not thats cool too!

Boy, did those kid's scare Shika! I found it very amusing. I like this chapter a lot. Why did you leave a cliffhanger! That was mean.*pouts* Enough of my childish behavior, and on to Kishin. HE is a vampire? A guessed maybe it was someone she knew but not him. Let me guess, is Shika going to be a vampire? Arrgg, I wanna know. Update!

ah no not long well long but not to the point where they making no sence and just blabbering which is a rare gift only given to some writers if i had to write a long chpt. to save my life with all of it making sence and no errors then well i would be screwed lol.

lol and i don't mind the story is awsome and yeah first reviewer!!

ok awsome how that came all out on that chpt. now ok she didn't get turned or is she getting turned into a vampire or she's just donating blood because there is a way for vampires to do that.also you talk about there world or whatever you might want to take some time before explaining that like research using stuff like underworld and stuff but really when you get into the death thing don't do anything b4 talking to me because there is so much crap about how to kill a vampire (u might think i'm crazy but - there are vampire gangs real vampires they get most of they're blood from hospitals and well ok and there's all these stages and so on -please don't think i'm crazy!)

yeah and about my story forgotten tears and shadows well that was my first story and i ran into problems didn't really make sense so i might have to do it over again and you along with other reviewers pointed out alot of mistakes so when i get some time i'll have to redo it :( sry

anyways again awsome chpt. please please please update soon!!

i wish u luck on your writing!

Happy Holidays and a late Merry X-mas

My, my. Doesn’t Shika’s life just suck? I pity her. I find her uncle VERY suspicious. I liked your story but I kept having trouble with the names. As I read your story I was wondering "How come her work isn't published; printed on paper and sold at bookstores?" Seriously, your work is like a lily compared to my daisies. You weren't joking when you said you had long chapters. I could've cut the two into four chapters. I'll take your word about high school being evil. I don't know how I'd handle it (I'm still in the 8th grade); I can't even stand my wicked math class, Integrated 1. Enough of my ramblings, update soon.PS: Elemental Guardian is up. =P

** ON TOAST THAT WAS LONG!

Ok so I finally read the God damn reincarnated verison of War and Peace (length wise) and to my full understanding ...it twas pretty well written. Of course there is going to be tiny errors, slight mishaps and lack of understanding becuase of teh ranting but we all have our flaws. May I suggest you go over it one more time. FAREWELL!!

-LS>

awsome story count me as a permanent reader and reviewer :)

i love vampires and i know a lot about them and if you have any questions about them just ask me :) i can tell you the real truth about them like crosses don't hurt them only big churches and water from very old church well and onions but onions only make them feel sick like a cold ecct. lol sorry i started babbeling.

anyways your story is awsome and i apriciate the long chpt. though i do understand how hard it can be to make them that long with out making the chpt.piontless and the characters just babbeling.

and you are very descriptive in your story and have and awsome way describing things and such...you have really good talent!

i wish u luck on your writing and hope you update soon!:)