"Enlisted to desist"

Awesome line.

lots of brightly colored imagry. awesome

WHOA! Absolutely gorgous, this was. (I feel like Yoda.) Seriously, your rhythm and command of language are inimitable. Bravo, brava, encore!

I relaly like the last stanza.. very well written

Very beautifully done, the imagery is superb mixed with the sophisticated writing style (which is quite rare on this site). Keep up the amazing wrtings!