Woa...I liked this story it was kind of weird and creepy sometimes i got confused but it was good.

Some parts could of course as with all writing use alittle work. There were some spots that were slightly weak; however overall, I did get awfully wrapped up into the story, and at times I truelly found it terrifying. Great Job. I look forward to reading more of your work. -Jossy

I liked this story a good deal. It was very inventive and just an all-around good job. Keep it up!-SevidianP.S. The toilets are the reason why I don't make brownies at school! JK

Scary! The beginning wasn't so good but the middle was creepy. But when things started to get unrealistic, it started to spoil the story. The endings needs some more work, otherwise a great story.