thes rhyme shceme is really cool and originial.. i think you mean fate though... other than that I really like it.. very cool and original

very unique. i enjoyed reading it. there's a spelling error on the second line, 'fate'. other than that, great job 0)

o0o, i like this very much. it flows so well, and it's dark too! such a yummy bonus. lol, i should cherish the poems i read from now on, seeing as how high school is going to take over my life soon, lol. really great poem, i liked how you used another style, it DID turn out really well...

Sumi-chan; What you call love, I call pain.

Yo, Shazaam... fate is spelled f-a-t-e, not f-a-i-t! lol You really are losing your mind, aren't you? lol J/k, anyway, this poem was really good, I liked it bunches of lots of bunches!... what was that about? lol Oh, well, GO SHAZAAM!

oh thats really different and weird... in a good way tho! i like the spookyness and all in this. very clever!

beautiful and deeply dramatic, your lines tpuch deep. love it.

* noelle