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| Karine Dragon'sheart 2006-08-30 ch 1,  | abuseI know that feeling! It sucks though when it wakes me up at five in the morning. Haunting and thrilling, it reminds me of my own nightmares... Laters, KD |
| Morwain 2006-04-26 ch 1, | abusethis was good it is fun to write things that come at you out of no where you never know what its gonna be |
| The Blazing Eclipse 2005-12-21 ch 1, | abuseuh...so...what exactly was the nightmare huh?...from what i can tell, someone slipped you the date-rape drug and you're spazzin' out...lol...anyway, i like it, i always liked the inner demons thing, you can prolly tell since i've used it before |
| happypills03 2005-11-25 ch 1, | abusenice.. i like it.. and i know the feeling.. all the sudden you wake up and boom... the darkness hits you.. |
| til-iburnout aka Amanda Hel... 2005-11-04 ch 1, | abuseI liked and don't think it need to be improved at all. |
| FictionPressPenName 2005-11-02 ch 1, | abuseWow. That was cool. Very well written. I liked the last part especially. Keep writing! |
| undepressed-one44 2005-11-02 ch 1, | abuseAmazing. You wrote it soo perfectly, the feelings matched exactly. Keep it up -freak from the corner |
| Victoria Corpse 2005-09-19 ch 1, | abuseTHis has very nice flow and rythm. I escpecially enjoyed the personification in the last stanza. Thank you for the review. VCorpse |
| Simply Stupid 2005-09-03 ch 1, | abuseGood rhyming structure. I like it too! |
| Sagaciouspnay 2005-09-01 ch 1, | abuseWOW! The best I've read so far! It flowed perfectly and I don't think u can change it any better! The best I've read today! Awesomeness! [[Sagaciouspnay]] |
| Skivverus 2005-09-01 ch 1, | abuseThe rhyme and setting are fine, but don't forget rhythm. Since it sounds like iambic tetrameter, find words to trim off - the first 'my' in line 3, the 'but' of the seventh line; however, some lines may take a more thorough rewording (fifth line could become, say, "My soul locked to their strict confines", for example). Well done overall. |
| Legolas'_Mistress 2005-08-31 ch 1, anon. | abuseReally interesting poem, I also liked the ryhming scheme. great job overall. |
| Saya Starshine 2005-08-30 ch 1, | abuseThis is how i feel everynight. I couldn't have said it better. It was really good |
| Skittle Trees Exist 2005-08-30 ch 1, | abuseThat happens to you too? Yay! I don't feel to odd anymore! |
| One Up 2005-08-30 ch 1, | abusei like some of the rhymes here. :) did you really write this at an early hour of the morning and...in fear? |