so this is a short story? Not bad at all. I liked the ending most of all, the idea you have is great. Maybe you should add more to your summary so it'll attract more reviewers. Anyway, keep writing on. Till next time

waterhealer ~.:.~

Hm.. have you by any chance read Hawksong or Snakecharm? Or both? This seriously reminds me of them...

Anyways, pretty good. I like it. Keep going!