The interaction between you and your surroundings is powerful.

This is packed with so much commentary about humanity in such a short poem, I'm just focusing in on one line I loved here but overall great! "consumer refugees paying our daylight extinction." well done

"the pile of tinsthat I jumped on."

ah that was a great weekend :D gd poem, i like the refugee idea.

H.

nice. Some interesting imagery there, too. I like the 4th stanza from the bottom. good job.

simpleton

M. I love this. Such great imagery. I especially loved this lines: packed like little chocolates

and: belongingsweighing us down like sin.

Great piece. So well-written. I'll be sure to check out the rest of your work, because this really impressed me.

*Hillary*