You know, I really like your fiction. It's very good. Good job with this one too. I'd like to know what 'Shelby' is doing that's getting her in such trouble, and what she's going to do next.

it was a nice beginning... do continue it, please..

good luck! :>

This is a great start! Very intense and fast-paced. Who were those guys?? I really hope you continue this soon, or I might collapse and die, and then I'd have to console myself by buying gummies or something. Don't let this happen! You're a very talented writer, and you've got me hooked!! God bless!:-) -- J.max

I'd like to see where this goes. You have talent! Very good. It describes what's happening without watering it down with descriptions too much.God Bless and keep writing! I want to read more from you.Sarah