Boring, insignificant, crappy, sucks more than hell.

Just my point of view. I'm sure Manda the anonymous ** liked your story, but I'm also sure that you're being her, and therefore you are a bitchy writer too.

Anyway, if I was a teacher and you were submitting a story like this, I'd give a B or C+ at the least because it's so friggin boring and trite. Seriously, ok? Also, not that many good words in here. What's wrong with you? Sorry if im posting a bad review, I'm sort of feeling like a bastard today.

Anyway, as a conclusion, this isn't that good. I wonder why Manda is in real life she must either be a loser OR your imaginary friend. Just a comment. May wanna think it over. SERIOUSLY.

Also, plot was awkward and really boring. I think I said that already. No conversation, no action. Put people talking and you'll have more people review this. SERIOUSLY/

Signed Review: X-ERagon-X

it's great! you better have gotten an A+