This poem was great, especially the imagery! The imagery was beautiful. 'He's a well flowered virgin'! Lovely. The general feel of the poem - ie, where the breaks were - just really drove it home. It was magnificent. My favourite line was:

wailing against the

wall, he’s wasting away.

Just beautiful, truly! I loved it! It's favourited!

pretty good. . . NOT

Well... it's very... uh... short. Okay.

It's so open, I don't think I've come accross anything like this.

LOVE IT! I love the imagery, amazing job.

Shavo

sad and well done

this seemed very angry to me. i like it, very nice. simple.-The Lady Elaine

Conveys strong transitions in life.

Throwing away one of the world's creatures' most straightforward and obvious functions in order to retain a conservative stance... this could apply well past sex and into anything that pertains to choosing not to live, one might say, in favor of remaining clean, unscathed... unrealistic. Nice.

this reminds me of a boy I know. though a name comes to mind for me, a different image grew when I read this. a skinny, frail, pained boy, anguished expression, ribs sticking out. it was a strange experience because the boy that fits this poem for me is none of those things. physically, at least.

I like the formatting, (the combinded sentences) Realy awesome. Nice job.

'well-flowered virgin' conures up some interesting thoughts and images in my head. ALmost like a child gorwing up to fast...hm...great job .

ah, very nice. the whole haiku is excellent. great job!-kwazykandypie AKA Kelly Ann-

Come now, not all virgins wail against walls! *Looks towards a wet wall on his right* Eh... nice haiku.

this piece is heavy and really makes you think...well done