|Reviews for Lord of Fire|
| Gert-Abby-Celenky 9/4/05 . chapter 1
ok everything happens way to fast, your gramar also sort of screwed me up. i am sort of confused at what was happening, i had to reread alot of it. the beginning was great though, it really caught my attetion. just work on slowing it down some, and reading stuff over so that way the reader isnt confused and can understand what is happening.