good i like it

that was just amazing. so deep and i love the last stanza x

Wow... That was really deep. I love the whole repetition, I nearly laughed out loud at the last stanza. It really gives you a profound sense of life, especially the second stanza. You had a great grasp on what goes through the mind of people. I'm finding it hard to come up with some CC... Ah! In the second stanza, it sounds a bit choppy in the end. Perhaps change the line breaks a bit so that it flows, and maybe change 'sadly are lacking' to 'are sadly lacking.' It would just float along a bit better, because you sail through the first stanza and a half and then you kind of get stuck on those few lines, which hinders the momentum of the poem. Toodles!

--Holli!

I'm not sure what to say about this poem. It's making me think, though, and I suppose that's what a good poem should do. Anyway, good job.

I love this! Very powerful and thought provoking, but with an unexpected anti-climax. Very nice.

Amazing. Few other words can describe how much I love this poem. Favorites list for sure.

I love the ending. It's so...I dare myself to say nihilistic, in a sense. I don't know. I just like it a lot. It's so reality bordering on fantasy. Ah, it's just incredible.

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