Ah now i get it somewhat. Nice going! This is a new format of poetry...

You got hit by a car at the end? I don't get the first stanza. I thought it was supposed to be burning with passion? What has that to do with dead flies? Someone's got to give me the low-down...

cool

interesting format.. I like it

Whoa. Again you come up with an entirely new style which hey, I doubt has ever done before. Guess you've surpassed me in this department, eh? It's weird, but good in a sense. The way the two chapters connect seem to make the flow seem like a kind of subconscious bond between two people. It's almost alive in a sense, and I guess that translates as 'this is good'. Ignore what other people might say about this, if they condemn it, I mean. At least you're doing things your way.

I don't understand.

Huh...? I don't think I underst - oh wait there's chap 2. Hang on...

I really liked this :) and the way it was set out... and I kinda get what its about :) I like the way you write, the short sentences/single-word sentences makes a real impact and makes it seem more important :) keep up the good workx

Ah, another "experimental" poem. Judging by the content, this particular poem is an Experiment in Sucking **.

It does what it does very well--which, may I remind you, is Sucking **.