hey Alex can u do me a favour and R&Rlove the story

Love the language structure

Nice engagement of the five senses

:)

I love the part about "Stolen kisses in mosh pits." Ah, I would love to mosh to the Arcade Fire. Of course currently my concert record is zero (but it will be one! september 9! bloc party! haha... sorry i'm telling everyone who will listen.)I like the meter, at first it seems a little awkward (which is a GOOD THING!) and then it gets a lot easier to... get? I'm bad with words, sorry. Beautiful language, buy the way! Gorgeous writing. All of it. Thanks for your review. XOXO

compelling and seductive, this is a wonderful piece. Im impressed with the format as well as the lexical choice.

This was beautifully written and I know how this feels. I fell in love with a guy I couldn't be with and he hurt me a lot but for some reason I still loved him.

I really like this. Great words and great imagery. It's simply delicious!

*Hillary*