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| Cassy 2006-05-20 ch 30,  | NEVER MIND!! I re-read the story and NOW I understand!! YAY!! LUKE! |
| xoxstorii-gurrlxox 2006-05-19 ch 30,  | I am totally your biggest fan, but i realy wanted the queen to die, i dont know why though. i totally hope that you are making a sequal to this..like i said..i am totally your biggest fan!! love you bunchesTaylorprincess-vampire15 |
| Justine 2006-05-19 ch 30, | I thought you were going to kill him! But you didn't so me is happy...but now the story is over. So sad, but a great ending, but whats with the top hat? |
| Cassy 2006-05-19 ch 30, | IM CONFUSED! it Is Luke that we all saw but wth is the thing bout the red stone? |
| Ash 2006-05-19 ch 30, | Yay, great story Liz! I'm sorta confused about how Luke got there though and what happened to Nashuard... |
| etariel 2006-05-19 ch 1, | it's a great story but sad. i think you should maybe go over it a couple tmes for mistakes but other than that it's great. it seriously made me cry |
| Karleena 2006-05-18 ch 29, | hey...write more NOW! lol this is really good lizzie! cant wait to read more! |
| Justine 2006-05-18 ch 29, | yeah! We are going to kill the evil wizard men, and he's going to die! Cause we're going to kill him!...You get my point. Nice job, Zil! |
| elizabeth1232130 2006-05-18 ch 29, | YEY! 1 chapter left... It is probably going to take me a week to write... but I will try to finish it tonight... (too much information) lol. Well I have to go! (I don't wana go to school -_-; ) -Elizabeth |
| Ashy 2006-05-17 ch 29, | Man, I was gonna guess that they would die, but I figured that you were gonna kill off more important people! :P "Do it for Gnalf. He asked us to kill him, didn’t he?" When I first read this, I thought that it meant that he asked us to kill him (Gnalf)! >_> lol And now I think that you're gonna write a very very sad and depressing ending because of something you told me earlier today... (I can think of how you'd make it happy, but then that would be weird. And if you don't know what I'm talking about, then I'll tell you in private later.) |
| xoxstorii-gurrlxox 2006-05-17 ch 29, | hey hey..Hurry up and update..im in suspense!! :PLove Taylor |
| Cassy 2006-05-17 ch 29, | NO! KARARD! U'D BETTER UPDATE SOON!! AND WE'D BETTER WIN!! btw, is that 2 more pplez dead? can they be counted as dead?... |
| elizabeth1232130 2006-05-17 ch 28, | Hello! (it is fun to review to my own stories...) Anyways... Thsi story is almost over... only 2 chapters left on this one. (thank god!) I am getting tired of everyone waiting for me to write... but just to let you know, I already got a new story to start after this one! YEY! Well... 3 more people die... YEY! (I love to kill people...) Thankyou SpiderLily. I will make sure to use those tips in future stories. Also... with making fun of 7th graders... you havn't seen how short they are in our school XD. (Some are tall... but not all) Besides... I wrote the first few chapters near the end of grade 8. (I have writers block oftan) Well... I have to go to school... (EVIL!) Keep reading -Elizabeth |
| SpiderLily 2006-05-16 ch 2, | well, it's a great idea. i have to admit i've had this story in my head for years that is nearly just like this one. except there are six of them, and no stones; just elements. there are two things that i want to critique though. 1. the descriptions. if you look towards being a professional author then don't do it. it's okay to do a bit, but you want to do it gently. mention only a bit of what they're wearing, but leave the rest to the imagination of the reader. if you do mention it, mention it in normal context. Like this: Cassandra's pastel gown sparkled in the dim light as she moved. 2. please don't make fum of the seventh graders! -SpiderLily |
| Justine 2006-05-16 ch 28, | How utterly depressing, but it's good though! Nice job, Zil! |