 bloodmoon15 2006-07-14 . chapter 1oh...i liked this thingy. it was really good! short, but believable and good use of language. good description. good speech thingies. tense was fine. sweet and to the point. i like the little thoughts because they were very honest and like things that i think all the time, or at the least the WAY she was thinking them. |
 Michelle Munoz 2005-09-02 . chapter 1Ooh, I get to review again! Did you even get my first one? I hope so. In any case, I'll say it again, I loved it! I think you only had a few parts where you forgot to put space between a word or two. Other than that, you're fine. And yes, the characters ARE always right ^_^ ~Sao |