 Talen Spira 2005-09-03 . chapter 1Not a bad start, it deffinitly grabs the imagination, it only leaves me why the white stag appeared, when he was hunting the other two, and how he knew his true name, if he didn't know who gave it to him, or how he got his weapons if he spent most of his time living away from civilisation, which is the impression I got from you. Perhaps you could expand on these issues when you update? Aside from that, you have a detailed writting style, painting a vivid picture of the forest, and your character. Keep writing... |