Very short, and yet it packs quite the punch. It distubed me, and the more I think about it, the more disturbing it gets. That was probably the point... LoL. Anyways, good job, you got the message through without the melodramatic overkill that's so frequent in these types of texts. BTW, having just battled with writing an explosion scene for a story of my own, I have to commend on pulling it off and making it sounds natural and believable. They're a b*tch to write! LoL. Keep it up.

this was a really good short fic. good job, this was really intersting and well written.