Aww... this is really cute and sweet! I love it! Wondeful job!!

This creates the scene so well. Encompasses the naivety of children well, and the awe of simple things that sadly get lost on adults. Well written.

This is really good work. Not a fan of the rhyming myself, all though this is pretty well done. Thought wraps up nicely, picture is complete, amazing :)

I believe you may have just won the "Empathic Life's top favourite fictionpress poet" with this one right here. Just think of it as the grammy or something. . . Not really, of course. Yes. Well. I will review the remainder of your stuff tomorrow. I have to go to bed now. Night!

The last line *kills*.

I love this. So innocent written from a more mature point of view. Great job.

*Hillary*