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Fireeye Howlsong Rainpelt 2005-09-03 . chapter 1
Well, type it already! I demand the first chapter! NOW! C'mon, get it up!

lol. LITTLE outburst there. Yeah, little alright...

Anyways, please write more. The details are very good. They don't go into it and bring out a whole paragraph from one thing, but they don't leave it with only one sentence that tells nothing.

But what I am wondering, though, is things like:

What color were the dragon's scales? Did the fire light up the night for miles round, the other villages able to hear the dragon's last cry? Were other creatures there, pets, running away from the long, mournful sound as it gave its last cry of life?

Things like that will make it more interesting, keep the reader in the story. Get my meaning?
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