Good poem :) I love the ending verse the best though. Keep writting :)

~LinkAtrix

Very interestingly put. I like the whole repetition of the numbers, it adds to the effect that everything's moving so slowly. Good job with the descriptions too.

Wow. So much better then my poems to say the least. Love it. Very creative.

This is good. Unique. They're synonyms. Btw, White Rap Yall! is supposed to be lame. It just pokes fun at white rappers and how they say, "yo," too much. Hehehe no real prejudice intended.

I like this a lot, it has a childlike innocence woven into its lines. The "one step, two step, etc." did get slightly repetitive after awhile though. Nice job :)

This is a really good concept and i'm really impressed. definatly one of the best i've read here! well doneplease review me back!!-Tanaboo x x x

I'm in love with the ending.

"One step, two step, three step, four." This part kind of distracted me so I had to read the poem again. I totally understood it the second time around. Talent like yours belongs in my favorites list. =D check out my poems when you can and tell me what you think.