 LittleChoLo 2005-09-05 . chapter 1Beautiful imagery. This piece is all about imagery. I love the 'dying dance'. I like the alliteration there. You've captured a lot of contrasts in that - especially 'landing silent and pale in her raven hair'. That's another jem. However, I can't really catch the mood of Winter. 'Her eyes are cold', yet she is smiling. Is she a cruel, malicious season, then? That sounds accurate, and it is a very nice concept. I'd expand upon it a bit more.
The smile gives it a bright ending. I like that a lot. |
 Liv Alyttle 2005-09-04 . chapter 1Wow.Sestinas require so. much. *indistinct sound, waves hands around, spins in circles, smashes into wall*
My favorite stanza would have to be Autumn. Which would also be my favorite season though in this case I'm not biased. ^^ |