Thanks for the constructive critiscm...I did this for an english short story I had to write for school freshman year so its really my best writing. But thank you for the comment!

This story is good though some things are bothersome. I don't get why a girl would go alone in an abandoned looking builing and I don't think a complete stranger would just say their problems like that; it's just very unlikely. Overall, it was a good story and I liked the ending.