great job

there's only one word to describe this poem of yours: POWERFUL! what's amazing about this poem is that it shows how a lot of dreams we have are so hard to keep following, we might have to give them up. simply powerful and so beautiful, keep writing. your talent will pay off in the future judging by how much its evolved.-anime freakizoid X^_^X

I really liked this...it's was well woreded.

The rhyme and premise are both good, but a more consistent rhythm and trimming off excess syllables would do this piece quite a bit of good, especially the sixth, eleventh, and fifteenth lines. Not a bad start though.

the last line is excellent

Wah~ lovely, i especially liked the title, fits the poem perfectly^^

keep writing!

Its weird about dreams; I think we mourn them when they don't come true, but loosing one dream really only sets up space to form another, I loved it, keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.