You started out strong in the first chapter...however this one was not as interesting.The dialogue was unnatural...The senarios weren't played out realisticly.The reastions weren't realistic.Over all, it's no realistic.If you had sex ang got pregnant, would you really tell the father over IM?And his reaction felt like forced comedy to me...Hope that helps.~Brittany

wow that was really haunting...if those aren't real IMs/text messages that was a really creative way to write that...good job

I love the format. Please write more!

thats really good jackie.

Hm. Interesting, unique style ^_^ If you manage to keep it this way, I praise you. Allows freedom of imagination for readers to mould the characters, not making them particularly perfect, or monsters. Keep up the good work Chatt ^_^

oh drama. looks interesting. dont keep me waiting!

This is good, write more soon!

This is great so far. The style is really unique too. Hope to see more!

This is a very good story so far! I can't wait to see what will happen. I hope you update soon.

-Alyssa

Looking forward to the next chapter. I am sure this will be a very interesting story, and I really like the format. Keep it up!

~Brittany

tis sad ! lol thats al i gots besides that its probly a tearjerker i dunno we'll see huh Jac ? later chikie B~