Alright, I'm gonna give you honesty here because I have to say I like most of what I see. You have a lot of potential. Your descriptions remind me very much of Edgar Allan Poe, the entire feel of the story is very Poe-like to be honest. That's amazing. The only weakness I see would be that you tend to use a lot of run-on sentences. You could shorten a few sentences, take out some of the commas. Convert them into two or three sentences instead of one really long one, that's always best. But overall, VERY good, keep it up - if the rest of your writing is like this I want to read it!

I wasn't scared in the slightest. Still, it was incredibly well written! You are a great writer.