Interesting development! Its getting broader in its view now, bringing n the family! But I curse Onyx for choosing some chick over Michael!

Well the first chapter is a little hard to understand, mainly because you present so many new characters at once and don't tell us their names, so it's hard to keep track of them. I know it's intriguing and makes it interesting if you don't tell the names at first, but when there are so many characters, it's very, very easy to confuse them all and altogether forget about their traits and looks. I hope you repeat all those traits after you've told us their names, so I can understand who is who XD

Wow! This is getting very interestg! Please continue the story. Michael turning out to be the sensitive guy was quite unexpected for me, as I had pegged Onyz as the puppy-dog-at-his-heels type. Ah, is there going to be a lot of angst? Please don't hurt Michael too much; he is such a cutie!

Ha, I like this chappy much! It's great, just watch clarity on p.o.v. Update a.s.a.p.

>Getting Glass Burns

nice chapter, though a couple of times the p.o.v. was sort of unclear. other than that, nice.

>Really Clear

You have captured my interest.

hey, great chapter!! the tenses are slightly confusing, sort of, but still, good job.

>Warrior of Sceptres

looks interesting. id love to hear more

this seems like you have something here, but when you have the whole group talking, sometimes it gets a little confusing to tell whether or not it's someone new or someone previously mentioned. but it's good, update soon!

>Better Town