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| BlueJayWalking 2005-10-11 ch 1,  | abuseSomehow the last two lines really clicked. They capture so succinctly the essence of what so many people feel...wonderful!^^ The poem expresses the narrator's feelings simply yet clearly. One teeny thing though: I thought this line, "I fear I will fade" sounded a little awkward. It just didn't seem to fit in with the rest of the poem.. what about "I don't want to fade..."? ^^ Heh, maybe it's just me. Anyways, good job, keep writing!:) |
| wolfeh 2005-10-07 ch 1, | abuseWOW. Deep...powerful...emotional...moving... AWESOME! |
| Sacred Walking Corpse 2005-09-04 ch 1, | abuseRah! Why is this so perfect? Why do I relate to it so well? This is good... very good. Especially the bit about wanting to be remembered... this is all very true. Please keep writing stuff like this. |
| Sophie Ulquiorra Allen 2005-09-04 ch 1, | abuseVery nice poem. Speaks eons about love. |
| ADSpencer 2005-09-04 ch 1, | abuseThis is so passionate...when was this written? |