I'm sorry to say it but in chapter 3, I have began to lose a lot on interest. You have rushed into such a monstrosity on a complicated game that you have confused me, victoriously. I honesty have gotten confused and don't feel like reading much further.
Would you advise the sequel to the main story?

Dude, you've got a lot of tallent in the writing industry. The first chapter i found to be quite enjoyable and I understand most of the rules for the game provided. I see you have used quite a 'Yugioh' based game but on the whole very sucessful; I've seen many games but none in comparison to this.
I am reading your story consistantly and managed to coplete the entire first chapter within an entire day, although I am not a dedicated reader, myself.
I myself, am writing a game story, based upon both 'yugioh' and 'duelmasters' but I've added quite a big twist to the game. I would apreciate it if you read it and commented.
Thank you for such a great story ;)

Hey!
Not a bad chapter! I kinda found it a little odd that you would incorporate the idea that KH turns into a girl (from your fanfiction version), but who cares? Right? It was pretty good overall, and I can't wait for the next part?
 

MR

P.S
By the way, to add a little hint of insanity to lighten the mood a bit, how's this for Sakura's entrance:  KH and the gang are at the beach, enjoying some much deserved R&R. Sakura's boat appears over the horizon, and it seems she's about to die from starvation.

 

That'sall I could come up with for now. What do you think?

this reminds me of the Duel Masters and YU-GI-OH card games. combining two cool games like that should make a great story.

Woah! Cool chapter, man! I think that when they are saying that "skill" "passion" "duty" etc. stuff, KH should say at the end, "victory". It really felt like they might lose while facing those gaurdians... The card of the chapter was nice and random, and lighthearted, and that's a good thing.

Hey, this is pretty good. It would've been interesting to see KH's darkside manifest, though.

Ruler of all demons? cool! Also sounds like about a billion ninjas died in the process. I liked the mentioning of the Kitsune.

I love your story and your fanfiction net Love Tea

Suggestions:
Bleach characters, maybe a new character-shinigami

Could you please do character bios of your story?

Hey! Its good to see some regular dueling after the Annihilation 7 story arc. I really liked this chapter.

And 1 thing: Why is everyone out to get KH? Get he get a break?

Great! I like this! Its a perfect ending for a such a great Story Arc!

Sorry, I've been a bit behind on some of your chapters lately, a problem which will soon be remedied.


I think Krieger the Chaos Knight is an awesome character!

I think that, reading what the green monk had just said to KH, Nova is going to use those Duelists that weren't selected to go look for those memories and give them to him. Once Nova has all the memories, he would use them to his advantage when he and KH duel eack other…

 

 

Of course, this is all just a guess.

Barry Frost has a little brother? and a ninja at that?
That intoduction of Lilly and Pete was really interesting

Nice chapter!! The gang is all together and Riku is less of a jackass! Very good!
(for lack of a better review)

THIS FIC IS AWESOME DUDE I LOVE IT I PLAN TO READ YOUR WHOLE SERIES!