I liked your theme. I also really liked your use of personification.

I did not like the style. It was dull, the story didn't really move on its own. I suppose this is because of the fact that you wrote it as a NOLS presentation but I don't know what that is.

A review of little help.

This was written like the standard legends, and though it wasn't bad I did not really enjoy it. Part of the repetativeness I guess, and the character/constellation seemed fairly flat.