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| les petits bateaux 2005-11-07 ch 1,  | abuseWow...this is very deep and romantic. I like how Sam can comfort Annie in time of need and how sweet both of them look together. It would be interesting to see a continuation to this story, but I don't mine a one-shot. Very good job with this. ~~Trinity |
| cling peach 2005-10-28 ch 1, | abuse"She often dreamed of storming out in an explosion of screaming, pelting off into the pouring rain, before she remembered there had been nothing to scream about. There was nothing and that was why she left." What a powerful line. I love it. This is just awesome, especially since it's so easy to relate. I'm sure everyone has thought of doing this- I know I have. And I absolutely adore the line "It was a night pregnant with thunder and spitting lightning that she met him." It's just so... wow. I love the use of pregnant- so original. And I love him. And I love her. And I love this whole thing. Their relationship is amazing. It's so... beautiful. I think it makes a wonderful one-shot. It's so vague but it says so much. I can't help wanting more just because it's so great, but I think it sits well like this. It's truly perfect- you're a very talented writer. I adore it. Never stop writing. |
| aknightsgoldenrose 2005-10-10 ch 1, | abuseI think it makes a perfect one-shot. Very cute. |