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| Decollage 2005-12-18 ch 1,  | abuseGod... My mom tries things like this, I swear she does. We'll be driving down the street, and she'll suddenly stop in front of a group of kids: "Get out, dear." So I can relate. I love how you wrote John, especially, although a few events seemed a bit fuzzy and unexplained. Talking to Jenny was just... Weird. But hey, it fit in the storyline. Mood is a bit bitter, but it feels like it should be. Good peice. |