Hm. I have mixed feelings about this piece. There were parts that were a little drab, but then there were other parts that were great. The ending, for one. I really loved the ending.

Anyway, keep writing, and don't take this poem down!

This is really good. Excellent imagery, strong follow through. Adding to my favorites. And you hate this why?

I worship you as the high and mighty god/goddess (girl or boy? I'm not sure if you mentioned it in your bio. . .) of unique poetry. I'm glad there's someone on this site who doesn't spew out nonstop angsty crap. *bows head in shame*

M, awesome imagery. I can just taste this.

Great job. Keep writing.

Haha, this poem was fun. Midway you got consumed with the rhythm, which caused it to get a little too slick for its own good, and became flowy and dinky. Too bad, because the beginning was awesome, with lines like "With a mosquito-collecting habit" and "Magellan circled the world/But you double-circled mine." Also, the title of the poem really is kickass. So let's see... there are great lines here, it just goes on for too long and you get too conscious of what you're doing.

I love the way you described the growing of the trees. It awes me... you are a great poet.

How ironic how the poem you wrote is about wanting a peach tree when you hate those peach trees of yours. Or the peaches in general.

I like this part the most: "But if I’m going downI’ll turn aroundAnd take you with me"